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quiet time

sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 02:56:43 GMT

Silence

the silence of sand

swallowing voices

***

dunes whisper their secret

they travel one grain at a time

***

the end of day

snuggled against the horizon

***

night sky dropping in sheets over land--

stars appearing reluctantly

nocturnal lives begin their day--

by thin light from a cold, white moon

***

song of no sound, clear and sweet--

reverberation of silence, falling down

but granting my greetings through lucent air

to the distant farm dog calling

Re: quiet time

ROMARY — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:19:58 GMT

Beautiful.........you are very talented.

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:25:53 GMT

when I read that some liked. silence, I remembered this----I wrote it on a high desert

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ROMARY — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:27:26 GMT

Silence is refreshing..........Yoga of the mind.

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:35:25 GMT

yes...

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croemer — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:50:16 GMT

I can see in my minds eye each event. Nice...

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 03:51:34 GMT

TY...

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september — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:01:11 GMT

Nice...I love the line: ""they travel one grain at a time""

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Elstongunn — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:09:39 GMT

I can hear, smell, taste, and see these images in my mind.

Not overdone with cliched metaphors or overwrought descriptions. Just the right, light touch.

Beautiful poem.

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:15:49 GMT

I try to create my OWN cliches

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scotttie — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:20:24 GMT

I like it very much. It captures the beauty of silence.

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:25:13 GMT

I write my sensory experiences------TY, scottie

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Elstongunn — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:30:48 GMT

On 6/18/2014 sylviahomeatlast said: I try to create my OWN cliches

Well...that would be the exact opposite of ""cliche"".

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:33:31 GMT

if you used mine, that would be cliche----another fact: writers are well known stealers-----I completely avoid that

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sylviahomeatlast — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 04:45:27 GMT

by that, I mean a phrase, a word in context, even an entire line---I was trained to be original, even if it's bad---and I have lots of those. :-D

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LaterGator — Thu, 19 Jun 2014 05:52:29 GMT

It's a beautiful poem, Sylviahomeatlast. It reminded me of our recent vacation to the beach.